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drew this all by myself. no refs, no base, no nothing
just me, my emotions, and my lovely tablet


Playground school bell rings again
Rain clouds come to play again
Has no one told you she's not breathing?
Hello, I am your mind giving you someone to talk to
Hello

If I smile and don't believe
Soon I know I'll wake from this dream
Don't try to fix me, I'm not broken
Hello I am the lie living for you so you can hide
Don't cry

Suddenly I know I'm not sleeping
Hello, I'm still here
All that's left of yesterday



Hello (c) Evanescence
Art (c) ME

DO NOT STEAL!!!

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:star::star::star::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Impact

Well first of all, this is quite a lovely image to look at, so as well as general feedback there are a few little technical things I'd like to point out that I think might help you improve <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="15" height="15" alt=":D" title=":D (Big Grin)"/>

I'll do those first I guess.
For a piece drawn with no references toward anatomy this is very good, I especially like the form of the girl's left thigh, but there are of course some aspects that still need touching up - such as the connection between the foot and the calf.
Feet are of course quite difficult things to get to grips with, and even the slightest mistake can detract a lot from them. I understand of course that with a reference you'd be able to produce quite a detailed and convincing image - or at least that's what your skill in drawing from memory seems to be saying.
Another part I'm not so sure about is the girl's left arm, crossing over her hip - but that's really only a small detail so I won't say anything else on that.

The first thing that actually caught my eye when I was thinking about a critique, was the quality of the line. When the image is small it appears very smooth but upon looking closer, the sketchiness of the lines become very obvious. Hairy lines - as such. This may or may not have been what you intended, but just at a glance I would recommend working on getting a really smooth line in your drawings.
(Okay so I just went and had a look at your Gallery and saw that a lot of your work without bases actually does show some pretty good line work - so that's probably not so much of a problem!)

And of course, as far as impressions go, the image is clearly a product of a lot of emotion, and it does portray this very clearly. The pose of the subject, the blankness of the face and the simplicity of the white lines on black is all a very effective combination. If it means anything then I'd certainly encourage going deeper with this sort of work (but that's more of a personal thing, I just have a liking for things like this XD )
I'm actually tempted myself to see what I could do with a white on black idea, and to play around with how much detail I could suggest in a form using only line.

So yeah, overall I think it's pretty cool, and I hope my suggestions help in some way <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/let…" width="15" height="15" alt=":P" title=":P (Lick)"/>